Camera: Zoom Out
Camera: Long Shot
Action: Ticktockman walks in
Camera: Medium Shot
Dialog: Administrator - Master Timekeeper, The Ones Who Keep The Machines Functioning Smoothly have turned his file over, along with his time-card and cardioplate.
Camera: Medium Shot Pans Right to Left
Dialog: Ticktockman - This is what he is, not who he is. This time card I'm holding in my left hand has a name on it, but it is the name of what he is, not who he is. The cardioplate here in my right hand is also named, but not whom named, merely what named. Before I can execise proper revocation, I have to know who this what is. Who is this Harlequin?
Camera: Long Shot
Action: Air-boat moving in the sky
Camera: Close-up Shot
Action: Harlequin pushes the lever forward
Camera: Medium Shot
Dialog: Harlequin - Wugga-wugga-wugga
Action: Harlequin puts thumbs in his ears, sticks out tongue and rolls his eyes
Camera: Long Shot, Pan Left to Right
Action: Harlequin's air-boat passes the pedestrians
Camera: Long Shot
Action: Harlequin pulls the through-pins
Camera: Environmental Shot
Action: Jelly beans fall from sky
Camera: Long Shot
Action: Lots of things happened that made people late
Camera: Long Shot
Dialog: Harlequin - Now that is really disgusting. Disgusting and highly improbable. After all this isn't the Day of Desperado. A wanted poster.
Pretty Alice - You know, you speak with a great deal of infection.
Harlequin - I'm sorry.
Pretty Alice - No need to be sorry. You're always saying 'I'm sorry.' You have such massive guilt, Everett, it's really very sad.
Harlequin - I'm Sorry.
Camera: Long Shot
Action: Harlequin starts walking
Dialog: Harlequin - I have to go out again. I have to do something.
Pretty Alice - Oh for God's sake, Everett, can't you stay home just one night! Must you always be out in that ghastly clown suit, running around annoying people.
Harlequin - I'll be back around ten-thirty, okay?
Camera: Environmental Shot
Action: Firecracker rockets show message
Camera: Long Shot
Action: Harlequin blows horn
Camera: Medium shot zooming in for Close-up
Dialog: Ticktockman - Don't come back till you find him!
Camera: long Shots
Action: Shows different methods to find Harlequin and his capture
Camera: Medium Shot
Dialog: Ticktockman - Repent, Harlequin!
Harlequin - Get stuffed!
Camera: Medium Shot
Dialog: Administrator - Uh, excuse me, sir, I, uh,don't know how to uh, to, uh, tell you this, but you were three minutes late. The schedule is a little, uh, bit off.
Ticktockman - That's ridiculous! Check your watch.
Camera: Long Shot
Action: Ticktockman goes to his office making "mrmee" noise.
Nice transitions here. I like starting with the close up of the clock. Perhaps end with that as well?
ReplyDeleteDoes the noise at the end indicate the ticktock man is a robot?
Spend more time on the details and shading please but nice pacing / cutting overall.